One cold night two girls called Summer and Rose. When their parents were asleep they cut open a secret door and escaped.Then Summer wanted to touch a light and then they got sucked up in the light! Then their parents couldn't find them and then they found the secret door and found a pole screaming and then cut open the light and then they busted out of the pole and lived happily ever after. The end.
By Summer
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